Johnny was a tall man with the clearest hazel eyes you have ever seen. He had freckles and as that colgate smile of
his showed his dimples appeared in his both chubby cheeks. His friends use to
make fun of him because of his pointy elf ears and his bushy eyebrows, but it
didn’t really bother him. He was a shy and calm around strangers, but around
the ones he loved he was hyper, bubbly and very ecstatic. He went to school and
worked a part-time job, so he felt tired all the time and that brought a big
concern to him because he needed to concentrate, he needed to stay in the study
mode because midterms were around the corner. If he wasn’t studying or at work
he would get bored out of his mind, so he would always find something to do.
Maybe read a book or take a walk through the park. And that was Johnny.
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Trees
envied Johnny’s height. His eyes sparkled like emerald stones scattered in a
dry dead forest. As he smiled, he illuminated
the dark sky like shooting stares on the gloomiest nights. Johnny’s happiness, like a banquet of food,
rejoiced everyone that arose upon it. Along
with his adorable bullet holes on each side of his checks, he carried a lunar
freckle on his collar bone that made girls melt like butter. The wind combed Johnny’s wavy midnight
black hair in every directions.
A
mysterious dim fog surrounded him as he wandered among strangers, like a silent
lamb walking unheard through a thirsty valley. Around his loved ones, Johnny invigorated the
atmosphere and somehow made everybody come together. Johnny assisted the university and worked a
part-time job. At times, he seemed
weary. I knew that it concerned him
because he needed to focus in school. He
needed to emphasis his studies because midterms stood around the corner. Even though he worked a part-time job and
remained a full-time student he grew bored in his spare time. In his spare time, Johnny spends time with his
family and friends or sits on a ragged bench at the park to see the sun rays
disappear over the horizon.
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